Rock n' Roll Queen

Okay, this is very raw and needs some work. For one it's way too bland for my liking. I wanted a little more suspence, and a lot less discription. Although ...

I like this and I see where you were going with it. But you have to hook me with the first sentence. Starting off with: I looked outside the window. ...

Last night the thunder shook me.the hum of the vibrating windowpanes Wonderful my dear! this evoked such an image in my head...mostly because I love storms. Loved your rhythm. It ...

as a child I used to wonder why the night was feared wasn't it the time the stars came out? and the time for the cracked moon to reign? Talk ...

WOW...this is...amazing! Deep and profound. Nothing bad I can say about it.

(I would love some feedback...good or bad) All I ever wanted became everything I fear All I need, and everything dear, It's far away, six feet deep. Loving you was ...

First I am going to compliment your writing skills, because you are a great writer. Raw..but I see the greatness in it. However; I read this and I felt like ...

This is....Great!! No. Wait. Stop. I stop in that quiet street and think at the thought. When will I have a life of my own? I have it already dammit! ...

Okay, first I must say that I really enjoyed reading this. Your first line: There’s a big difference between telling yourself something and actually believing it. Sometimes you don’t realise ...

I'm not really into science fiction, but even I would read this. It sounds very interesting and I really want to know more. Let me know when you go futher ...

Thi is absolutely great. Haunting, chilling, earth shattering. Words really cannot describe how much I love this. Great job! However, I am sad that it ended. I loved the simplicity ...

I have to say that I love this, although I will have to agree with the others. I wanted more suspense, but you did a great job holding my attention. ...

I loved all of the details. I had to wonder about nothing! which I often find to be a problem with other people's writings. They always have me wondering. But ...

I actually really really like this! However you did lose me here: Well fuck, he said. And stood up and bent down, scuffling on the hardwood.Thunk-thunk.I’m really sorry, he said. ...

This is not really my cup of tea, so I wasn't really into it. However, I loved the way it was phrased and it had me hooked. I couldn't stop ...